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"To the red country and part of the gray country of Oklahoma, the last rains came gently, and they did not cut the scarred earth."
Here are a few improved versions, depending on the tone you're aiming for:
Option 1 (More concise): "The last rains fell gently on Oklahoma's red and gray counties, barely touching the scarred earth."
Option 2 (Maintains original rhythm): "To Oklahoma's red country and the gray, the final rains came softly, leaving the scarred earth untouched."
Option 3 (More vivid): "The last rains whispered across Oklahoma's red and gray counties, too gentle to heal the wounded earth."
The original has a nice biblical cadence, but "part of the gray country" is awkward, and "they did not cut" is unclear—rains don't typically "cut" earth. The improvements clarify the geography, strengthen the imagery, and create smoother flow while preserving the elegiac tone.
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